Rebecca, Rebecca, Rebecca — well, what can I say?! I think this is my most favorite piece ever of yours to date!!!!! I LOVE it! It's so soft and new-agey (in a good way) and so powerful at the same time. It's interesting that you chose not to put her in the tower, too. I wonder did it already happen, is she free or she just didn't get locked up yet? — oooh, shrouded in mystery! Like I said in Dee's feedback, I love it when an illustration leaves me wondering what's going on, because it's telling a story that I don't yet know the answer too.
I really dig the colors here and the whole full moon night-time scene thing you've got going on. it certainly lends itself to her wispy hair floating in the breeze. It reminds me of a Tarot card.
There's only a couple of iddy biddy suggestions I have — and of course, they are just suggestions.
I wondered if there could be a bit more contrast between Rapunzel and the background. I feel it's the top right corner that needs it most. Could you make the backgound darker so her hair stands out more, or maybe make her hair darker against the lighter sky? Tonally, right now, they are a little too similar, but maybe you want it that way. It is nighttime afterall.
The dark purple rock really jumps out, and while I think it works really well between the other two it throws the image's balance off to me just a smidge. I want my eye to be drawn to Raounzel right away, notthe rock. Perhaps if you did make Rap's hair darker, it could be this purple color. You know, at the back of her head where its shadowed from the moonlight? Then you'd have more balance.
Lastly, I wondred if the title needed to be a touch bigger and bolder. If you started the 'R' in the sky, rather than on her hair (move the title up a bit and to the right). Maybe try all caps, so that it stretches across the tower. (See the horizontal space between the top of the rocks and the bottom of the hair curls above?) Going back to contrast, this might be a nice way to bridge the balance between the hard, stone tower and her soft, floaty hair.
This is a wonderful illustration Rebecca, you should make this a portfolio piece!
Love the hair swirls, blue confetti and collage. (her dress is especially cool)
I understand what Leezy is saying about the contrast. I like the monochromatic mood. I think an interesting idea might be to put the contrast on the tower (make it really dark) to add to the somber mood you have going.
Great idea to put her outside of the tower, a very mysterious piece!
I love how mysterious this piece is. It has a very moody feel to it, with the full moon and Rapunzel gazing at the tower. I like the monochromatic palette, but I agree that there should be a little more contrast with Rapunzel. (I had trouble reading her dress. I thought it was background.) Maybe you could darken or create a shadow on the tower so that it also has a stronger presence. I think it would help balance the composition more. All in all, a great job with mutlimedia!
I absolutely love your approach of showing her at night and the colors you used suited the night time effect to a tee. Because she is out of the tower gazing back at it, her old/new prison, I can really feel her emotion and I think that's what makes this piece sing. It makes you want to know more about the story and what's going on with her. Definitely a porfolio piece.
I think maybe using some of the dark violet that is used under the tower in her hair or dress or headband may help to balance and make her pop just a bit more. Maybe a little thicker with the letters but the title placement works great. Nice job on the hand-lettered font!!
This is beautiful! I love the flow and movement of this peice. I feel like I'm standing with her on a windy evening, it's just lovely. And the multi media aspect of this, is brilliant! The texures are so rich and tactile...did you use a napkin for the bit below the tower? Stunning!
I like the idea of making the tower a bit darker, but ultimately I think this is a beautiful and strong piece.
Wow, interesting technique! Is that watercolor, ink and collage? Nice idea and look, the structures of the textures give great detail to the illustration, while not diverting too much from it.
I love the simplistic and delicate face of the girl! Without many features, you managed to make her look sad, that's pretty cool!
You created a great atmoshpere, a somewhat sad, dreamy, longing kind of mood. Her gaze at the tower makes one wonder what she's thinking about. What's gong on with the tower? Why is she standing on the outside? That's a really interesting take, by the way! The flying bits of blue paper are a cool detail, further emphasizing the mood, and giving a feel of wind, autumn, drama! Painting the sky in a gradient nightfall setting and showing a big full moon adds yet more mood to hit, cool!
For improvement suggestions, I'm wondering if the moon really needs to touch the top border of the page. Our mind is used to seeing flying things with air around them, so it could be worth considering to have it bigger, or higher up, or lower. The placement of the text seems a little bit out of balance with the illustration. There's quite a lot of visual weight on the left side, with the big flowing hair. To balance that, I think the text should definitely go more to the right. I see that you probably tried doing that, by making the "L" longer. While it helped, I think it needs more. An object coming in from the right side of the image might help too: a tree? In the same style of the hair? But that may take away from the focus of Rapunzel. It could also be an idea to leave the text out altogether to be created by the publisher. Personally, I find it sometimes hard to find the perfect font, and then to be able to draw it! Electronic media is more forgiving too - wrong placement? Click! :-)
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Rebecca, Rebecca, Rebecca — well, what can I say?! I think this is my most favorite piece ever of yours to date!!!!! I LOVE it! It's so soft and new-agey (in a good way) and so powerful at the same time. It's interesting that you chose not to put her in the tower, too. I wonder did it already happen, is she free or she just didn't get locked up yet? — oooh, shrouded in mystery! Like I said in Dee's feedback, I love it when an illustration leaves me wondering what's going on, because it's telling a story that I don't yet know the answer too.
I really dig the colors here and the whole full moon night-time scene thing you've got going on. it certainly lends itself to her wispy hair floating in the breeze. It reminds me of a Tarot card.
There's only a couple of iddy biddy suggestions I have — and of course, they are just suggestions.
I wondered if there could be a bit more contrast between Rapunzel and the background. I feel it's the top right corner that needs it most. Could you make the backgound darker so her hair stands out more, or maybe make her hair darker against the lighter sky? Tonally, right now, they are a little too similar, but maybe you want it that way. It is nighttime afterall.
The dark purple rock really jumps out, and while I think it works really well between the other two it throws the image's balance off to me just a smidge. I want my eye to be drawn to Raounzel right away, notthe rock. Perhaps if you did make Rap's hair darker, it could be this purple color. You know, at the back of her head where its shadowed from the moonlight? Then you'd have more balance.
Lastly, I wondred if the title needed to be a touch bigger and bolder. If you started the 'R' in the sky, rather than on her hair (move the title up a bit and to the right). Maybe try all caps, so that it stretches across the tower. (See the horizontal space between the top of the rocks and the bottom of the hair curls above?) Going back to contrast, this might be a nice way to bridge the balance between the hard, stone tower and her soft, floaty hair.
This is a wonderful illustration Rebecca, you should make this a portfolio piece!
Hey Rebecca-
Love the hair swirls, blue confetti and collage. (her dress is especially cool)
I understand what Leezy is saying about the contrast. I like the monochromatic mood. I think an interesting idea might be to put the contrast on the tower (make it really dark) to add to the somber mood you have going.
Great idea to put her outside of the tower, a very mysterious piece!
I love how mysterious this piece is. It has a very moody feel to it, with the full moon and Rapunzel gazing at the tower. I like the monochromatic palette, but I agree that there should be a little more contrast with Rapunzel. (I had trouble reading her dress. I thought it was background.) Maybe you could darken or create a shadow on the tower so that it also has a stronger presence. I think it would help balance the composition more. All in all, a great job with mutlimedia!
I absolutely love your approach of showing her at night and the colors you used suited the night time effect to a tee. Because she is out of the tower gazing back at it, her old/new prison, I can really feel her emotion and I think that's what makes this piece sing. It makes you want to know more about the story and what's going on with her. Definitely a porfolio piece.
I think maybe using some of the dark violet that is used under the tower in her hair or dress or headband may help to balance and make her pop just a bit more. Maybe a little thicker with the letters but the title placement works great. Nice job on the hand-lettered font!!
Your bricks on the tower are brilliant!!
This is beautiful! I love the flow and movement of this peice. I feel like I'm standing with her on a windy evening, it's just lovely. And the multi media aspect of this, is brilliant! The texures are so rich and tactile...did you use a napkin for the bit below the tower? Stunning!
I like the idea of making the tower a bit darker, but ultimately I think this is a beautiful and strong piece.
Well done!
Wow, interesting technique! Is that watercolor, ink and collage? Nice idea and look, the structures of the textures give great detail to the illustration, while not diverting too much from it.
I love the simplistic and delicate face of the girl! Without many features, you managed to make her look sad, that's pretty cool!
You created a great atmoshpere, a somewhat sad, dreamy, longing kind of mood. Her gaze at the tower makes one wonder what she's thinking about. What's gong on with the tower? Why is she standing on the outside? That's a really interesting take, by the way! The flying bits of blue paper are a cool detail, further emphasizing the mood, and giving a feel of wind, autumn, drama! Painting the sky in a gradient nightfall setting and showing a big full moon adds yet more mood to hit, cool!
For improvement suggestions, I'm wondering if the moon really needs to touch the top border of the page. Our mind is used to seeing flying things with air around them, so it could be worth considering to have it bigger, or higher up, or lower. The placement of the text seems a little bit out of balance with the illustration. There's quite a lot of visual weight on the left side, with the big flowing hair. To balance that, I think the text should definitely go more to the right. I see that you probably tried doing that, by making the "L" longer. While it helped, I think it needs more. An object coming in from the right side of the image might help too: a tree? In the same style of the hair? But that may take away from the focus of Rapunzel. It could also be an idea to leave the text out altogether to be created by the publisher. Personally, I find it sometimes hard to find the perfect font, and then to be able to draw it! Electronic media is more forgiving too - wrong placement? Click! :-)
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